Free
hugs
After I watched the video
first, I thought the man with the sign “free hugs” was a guy or someone who
needed a love and affection
so that he wanted to share free hugs to everybody who he met and I thought
probably in his mind, he thought to foster a sense of togetherness and
peace among other people although they didn’t know each other
before, so he did it by giving free hugs to
everyone he met. Second, I also thought
he was a nice and tough guy because he was not easily to
give up and not easily to desperate we can see that the man keep patience and passion to get a
hug even though initially no one wanted to hug
him and he also tried to keep his smile and keep friendly to
everyone who saw him although
other people who saw him felt he was weird. Initially the atmosphere was like black and white, because no one was
care about what is done by the man other than that, the people who saw him also laughed at her, because maybe they thought what he did was a strange thing and at first, the people
also did not respond to him and the people
did not want to be hugged by him and did not want
to give a hug to the man, because people
might think that
he was weird and crazy
because he brought
the sign "free hugs" while walking in the crowd and people might
think what is done by the man is a strange
thing to do or not reasonable.
After that, the
atmosphere changed became more colorful because after the man walked in a long time then, the man met with a grandmother and the man greeted the grandmother next, they hugged each other at that time they
looked loving each other and they looked happy when they shared a hug, that’s way the free hugs happened and then, Police banned the man to do free hugs. Third, I thought the police forbade him because he did free hugs in public places and the people who followed what is done by the man to perform free hugs increasing number so that, the police might think that what the man did could disturb the public or people as more and more people followed the man action then, this would make the crowd which could interfered the
public so
that the
police forbid it, maybe the police did not know what the purpose of his free hugs did. Other than that, free hugs action which performed by the man and the people included an illegal action because they had not obtained permission to do so.
Next, when the police tried to stop free hugs campaign action then, the man and those who supported free hugs action tried to do petition by collecting signatures as a sign permit application to do free hugs campaign. After that, the police asked the man and the
people who supported the man to collect the signature a number of 10,000 signatures to get permission to perform action such free hugs. The target of the signatures were 10,000 signatures, at first they got 83, then 136, next 572
signatures, 1850, 2134, after that 5395 signatures, then 7840 signatures until they could reach their target to get 10,000 signatures, so they got permission to do free hugs campaign. In the end the man and the people got permission to do
free hugs campaign finally all of the people were happy included the police and
they shared their hugs with each other. The main point of this video, it showed
us about how to make a peaceful among others people although we didn’t know
each other people yet just by doing a little or simple thing such as by sharing
a hug and the video also taught us to respect each other, appreciate
the difference so then by sharing free hugs could create togetherness.
Wow, amazing. You could write a lot of things.
ReplyDeleteMake sure you have a clear topic sentence and one single idea in a paragraph. e.g in the last paragraph you have two ideas, e.i the last controlling idea of your essay as well as the concluding sentences.
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You need to revise this sentence "Police banned the man to do free hugs third, ...."
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ReplyDeleteAfter I read this post carefully and clearly, I find there were some mistakes about your post. The first one is you no need to write “after I watched video”. We already knew about that. You can change it sentence with the explanation of free hugs or you can jump into the first content that you saw in video. “first I thought the man with the sign “free hugs”, was a guy” from that part you need to put comma after “first” and remove comma before “was”. You prefer to use so many conjunctions like so that, and, but to bridge each sentence. I think, it is better for you to put full stop where it needed. It makes me a bit confused with your post. From one of your sentence, it can separate into several sentences. At the third paragraph, it I think it can form into two paragraphs because those two sentences have different topic sentences.
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