My Bad Experience
Did you have a horrible moment? What did you feel?
When you felt scared, what would you do? And if a gang of girls made you
scared, would you against them? Bullying action as we all know is such kind of
impolite action that some people do to someone who they don’t like. It is same
as my story when I was in vocational high school. At that time, I thought that
I was the victim of bullying action. Indeed, it was unbelievable moment of my
life but in fact it was real. My first grade in senior high school is my fearful
moment of my life.
There was bullying action in my school. Some friends (a
gang of girls) liked to disturb me. I wondered why they didn’t like me. I
thought that I was a good girl, I was diligent, polite, and friendly. Instead, all
of the teachers who taught in my class liked me. At that time, I also got the
first rank in my class. I thought that my friends didn’t like me probably
because I was stingy in sharing answer. I also have got wrong judgment from my
friends. They judged
me as a
wicked person. Sometimes,
my friends made fun of me. They also underestimated me. At that time, I tried
to be strong and patient although they badmouthing at me.
I was feeling depressed. I didn’t have so many friends at that
time. Wherever I went, I was always alone.
Every day I felt lonely and had no friends. I became lazy to go to
school because I didn’t feel comfortable with the situation. At that time,
every day I wondered what would happen to me on that day. When I felt sad and
disappointed, I liked to cry in the toilet. Many things, I liked to think. I
felt my days were full of problems, it made me so stressful. Sometimes, when a
lot of friends approached me at the same time, I would feel afraid and panic.
If I remember it, I will feel so sad. It is unbelievable, why I have
experienced something like that.
At that time, I was gloomy almost every day. Sometimes, I sat
alone in the corner of the class. My friends liked to say if they sat next to
me, they would get a bad luck. I thought that they were really cruel to me.
Tough so I always prayed and tried to accept their bad attitudes or their
treatment to me sincerely. I didn’t like to talk too much with the others.
Bullying action made me became a passive student. I mean passive in term of
association with friends. I also had lack of self confidence but fortunately it
didn’t affect to my spirit for studying and my achievement because I
always believe every
problem must have a way out and God
will always be there
for me.
In short, I don’t want to experience bully action again. A very
bad experience that I’ve ever had when I was in vocational high school has left
bad memories in my memory. The first year in vocational high school when I was
in the first grade was a scaring moment that I never forget. I hope bullying
action will not happen to me again.
Wow. You have a scary experience Gita. I think it is so hard to face that kind of situation. You are so strong enough because you can pass that situation. If I become you, maybe I will ask my parent to bring me to the other school. :D
ReplyDeleteYou have a good writing. You have done your best in this writing. However, I think you have to pay attention on your grammar.
In the last sentence of the second paragraph, you wrote "At that time, I tried to be strong and patient although they badmouthing at me. "
I think, it should be, "At that time, I tried to be strong and patient although they were badmouthing at me."
Overall, you have done a good job. Just keep writing to make it better and better. :)
Thank you Gita :)
Hi Gita. I am so sorry to hear that horrible experience of yours. I can't imagine if that happen to me. No wonder, you are so a strong girl to pass your vocational high school in such situation. If I were you, I wouldn't never doubt to move from that school, immediately. Well, I hope you already feel better now and I hope you'll never get that horrible situation again.
ReplyDeleteLet's move to your text then. I also think the same with Widya that you have to more focus on your grammar and also the spelling of the words.
"Did you have a horrible moment?"
I don't know why but I think this sentence is little bit weird even the grammar is correct. How about if you change it into "Did you ever have a horrible moment?"
wel,, for me, that's better.
In general, I think your text is good, and, because it is a real experience, I think this is totally a horrible experience.
that's all about my comment. Bye Gita :D