Tuesday, November 19, 2013

Final project of free hugs




Create togetherness by sharing Free hugs

When you feel alone and sad, I think a little thing that you can do is sharing your love to another by free hugs. Probably, the man with the sign “free hugs” was a guy or someone who need love and affection. He wanted to share free hugs to everybody who he met. I think probably in his mind, he wanted to foster a sense of togetherness and peace among other people although they didn’t know each other before. He did it by giving free hugs to everyone he met. I also think he was a nice guy because he was not easily to give up. We can see the man kept his patience and passion to get a hug even though initially no one wanted to hug him. He also tried to keep his smile and kept friendly to everyone who saw him although the other people who saw him, felt he was weird. Initially the atmosphere seemed black and white because no one was care about what had done by the man. The people who saw him also laughed at him, maybe they thought what the man did was a strange thing.
At first, the people did not respond to him and the people did not want to be hugged by him. People might think that man was weird and crazy because he brought the sign "free hugs" while he was walking in the crowd. People might think what he did was a strange thing and not reasonable.
After that, the atmosphere changed to be more colorful when the man walked for a long time then, the man met with a grandmother. The man greeted the grandmother. Next, they hugged each other lovingly. They looked happy when they shared a hug. That’s way the free hugs happened and suddenly, Police banned the man to do free hugs. I think the police forbade him because he did free hugs in public. The people who followed the man’s action to perform free hugs was increasing. Perhaps, the police thought what the man did could disturb the society because of that the police banned it. I think, the police did not know what the purpose of his free hugs campaign. Furthermore, free hugs campaign which done by the man and the people was an illegal action because they had not obtained permission to do it.
Then, when the police tried to stop the free hugs campaign, the man and those who supported free hugs campaign tried to do petition by collecting signatures.  The target of the signatures were 10,000 signatures. At first, they got 83, 136, next 572 signatures, 1850, 2134, 5395 signatures, after that 7840 signatures until they reached their target to get 10,000 signatures, so they got permission to do free hugs campaign.  In the end, all of the people were happy included the police and they shared their hugs with each other. In conclucion, I think by sharing your love with free hugs can create togetherness and show how to make peace among other people although we didn’t know each other. A little or a simple thing such as sharing a hug also taught us to respect each other, appreciate the differences so then by sharing free hugs we can create togetherness.

Thursday, November 14, 2013

Wisnu's Free Hugs Campaign


Outline Paragraph "  Free Hugs Campaign " by Wisnu Bayu Temaja

Topic sentence         : People want to share their happiness among the people.

1.      Major supporting sentence 1  : It was followed by another people who want to get a free    hug. (It was followed by another people who wanted to get a free hug)

Minor supporting sentence    1   : They wanted to make free hugs allowed anymore

Minor supporting sentence 2 : Free hugs allowed again by the police and they invited everyone who wanted to get free hugs, including the police. 

Conclude sentence                       : People want to share happiness among the people no matter age, job, or anything else and this is the real form or the real action in sharing happiness to the world.


Grammar                                        : I think there are some mistakes with the grammar, because in your paragraph the tenses that you used is not consistence for example (a lot of question) a lot of questions (people who want to) wanted to (of get signature) of getting (they are looking for ) was looking.

Vocabulary                            : I suggest that the word ‘slipped’ in the sentence they just slipped by around him, probably you can change it by ‘go past, go by or pass.'

Mechanic                             : I think in this sentence “They might think he was unique, strange, odd, or just want to create a sensation, or even worse they thought that guy was crazy. “there are many “comma”. There are already time signals in your paragraph.

Comment in general :

After I read Wisnu's post, I think it is good enough. At the beginning Wisnu tells about the situation around the man with the sign who shares free hugs with each other people even though they don’t know yet each others. There are already time signals in Wisnu's paragraph. But, I think Wisnu can develop his paragraph and makes the paragraph become a little bit longer. I also suggest you that you should be careful with the grammar that you used in your paragraph.